Interesting concept, but the lighting leaves something to be desired. Yes, I understand it's natural, but it would enhance the picture to have either a dangerous or inviting light. Other than that, I applaud your originality.
I just love the look in her eyes. The desire, and I do not think the wording is distracting, I think it adds. The greenery is a bit distracting, just too unbalanced.
The model is great and nice pose, however I find myself totally distracted by the words on the tin boarding and by the small flower poking in bottom right! Both stop me looking at the model